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Daily Deviation

Given 2013-01-15
The Nature of Lungs by *schongslipper has an exceptionally executed structure to complement the content of the poem. ( Featured by Nichrysalis )
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SakuraDreamerz2 Featured By Owner Jan 16, 2013
This is amazing!
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schongslipper Featured By Owner Jan 16, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you so much!
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SakuraDreamerz2 Featured By Owner Jan 16, 2013
You're welcome!
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Skylanth Featured By Owner Jan 15, 2013  Hobbyist Artisan Crafter
Wonderful! Love the structure.
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schongslipper Featured By Owner Jan 16, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you! I tried to pull it off without having that one word a line thing going. I hope I achieved that...
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Skylanth Featured By Owner Jan 16, 2013  Hobbyist Artisan Crafter
I think so! It really has the rhythm of a deep inhale and exhale.
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schongslipper Featured By Owner Jan 16, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
thanks =]
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restlessreverie Featured By Owner Jan 15, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
congrats on the DD~^^ great piece!
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schongslipper Featured By Owner Jan 16, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you!
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rockerjase Featured By Owner Jan 15, 2013
This could be about all the useless crap in people's lives (including my own) and how humans always want more and more as if it will make them feel more satisfied, but in reality we would best off getting away from all these petty distractions that clog up our lives. I don't know though, I didn't write the poem... :/
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schongslipper Featured By Owner Jan 16, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
That's a variation on what I wanted it to mean. I wrote it a long time ago so I don't remember the exact thought process that brought me to it, but it was basically about how people get so caught up with something and forget there's another part to it. Does that make any sense?

Your interpretation is very similar. I'm happy I could both communicate what I meant, and make someone think of something new! Each are immeasurably important to me.
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rockerjase Featured By Owner Jan 16, 2013
Yeah I know I what you mean, that's really more what I meant to say but I think I over complicated it, I'm not really great at expressing my thoughts in words. Anyway great job on the poem :)
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schongslipper Featured By Owner Jan 16, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks!
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Dreamer-of-Magic Featured By Owner Jan 15, 2013   General Artist
wow. :clap: beautifully written.
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schongslipper Featured By Owner Jan 16, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you so much!
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Dreamer-of-Magic Featured By Owner Jan 16, 2013   General Artist
:) you're welcome!
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HoldTheNoise Featured By Owner Jan 15, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Congratulations on the DD! Quite a unique style you've got there.
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schongslipper Featured By Owner Jan 16, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you so much! Style is one of my favorite elements to writing, so that you liked it in this piece means a lot.
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mmschmidty Featured By Owner Jan 15, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
this is just incredible. i can't quite identify what it is i love most about it, it's just overwhelmingly perfect. great work.
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schongslipper Featured By Owner Jan 16, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you so much!
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:iconvon19:
von19 Featured By Owner Jan 15, 2013  Student Writer
Hoho~ Bravo :D
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schongslipper Featured By Owner Jan 16, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you!
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OmegaTheOmniscient Featured By Owner Jan 15, 2013  Student Traditional Artist
Inhaled until I got to 'out.'



Exhaled.

This is simply wonderful.
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schongslipper Featured By Owner Jan 15, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you so much! I'm flattered that you responded physically to this; that's a true compliment.
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OmegaTheOmniscient Featured By Owner Jan 15, 2013  Student Traditional Artist
You certainly made it easy. Poems that make me think, I like. Poems that make me feel, I love. Poems that make me do... I can't find the words for it. A smile is all that comes to mind.
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schongslipper Featured By Owner Jan 16, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I know exactly what you mean!
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Utsukushi17 Featured By Owner Jan 15, 2013
Interesting...I like.
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schongslipper Featured By Owner Jan 15, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you so much!
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Nullibicity Featured By Owner Jan 15, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
A perfect deviation deserving of such an achievement! I am so happy for you, that I cannot express my excitement for you! This is wonderful; I hope many people will come to recognize and appreciate your talents after this honor (:
It truly was a gorgeous poem. I especially loved the decided spacing between "breathing" and "out." In my opinion, it really immersed the reader within the narrator's words... I actually found myself holding my breath until I read the word of release :giggle:. Fantastic job, and I cannot say congrats enough!!
You deserved this :tighthug:
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schongslipper Featured By Owner Jan 15, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Aw =] What kind words! Thanks so much for your feedback and flattery. I love to hear you held your breath; to me, an achievement like that merges the physical and mental, and to be able to do that with words will always be a phenomenon to me.

Thanks for commenting and reading!
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Nullibicity Featured By Owner Jan 18, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
And you have created that phenomenon! It was wonderful (:
I do like to immerse myself pretty deep into literature, but I do not often react in such a way... so I have a very high opinion of this poem!

You are most welcome! It was truly my pleasure!
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schongslipper Featured By Owner Jan 20, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Your opinion is so very much valued in my mind. I'm glad you liked it =]
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Nullibicity Featured By Owner Jan 21, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I did :D
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schongslipper Featured By Owner Jan 22, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
=]
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Karinta Featured By Owner Jan 15, 2013  Student General Artist
That's very true. This poem is exceptional, as the featurer said.
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schongslipper Featured By Owner Jan 15, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you so much!
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Karinta Featured By Owner Jan 16, 2013  Student General Artist
You're welcome, dear.
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InklingsOfOblivion Featured By Owner Jan 15, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Whilst reading this, I experienced it. :clap: great great work
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schongslipper Featured By Owner Jan 15, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you so much! It's a true compliment that the poem had the power to exert itself in such a manner. I love the way you put it =]
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InklingsOfOblivion Featured By Owner Jan 20, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
:) I think it's wonderful that your writing has that power.
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schongslipper Featured By Owner Jan 20, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I think it's wonderful that art can have that effect in general :)
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InklingsOfOblivion Featured By Owner Jan 22, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Very true. :) :dalove:
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Bleeding-Magic Featured By Owner Jan 15, 2013  Student Photographer
You've delivered your message so beautifully. :heart:
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schongslipper Featured By Owner Jan 15, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you!
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Zee-Who Featured By Owner Jan 15, 2013  Hobbyist
Congrats on your Daily Deviation!:squee::heart:
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schongslipper Featured By Owner Jan 15, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you so much!
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Euxiom Featured By Owner Jan 15, 2013
Lovely piece. It has a quality of feeling light like air itself, to me. :giggle: Congrats on the DD.
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schongslipper Featured By Owner Jan 15, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you so much! That's one of the elements to it that I was I was going for, so it's great to hear that =]
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Euxiom Featured By Owner Jan 15, 2013
Welcome! :) Hooray for success!
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schongslipper Featured By Owner Jan 16, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
=D
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