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There's that
feeling
you get
when you
keep
breathing in and
are
so concerned with getting
air into
your lungs,
to fill them up
so fully
that
you'll never
need
to inhale again,
that you forget
about
breathing



out.

But when you do,
the emptiness feels
so
much better than all
the oxygen in the world
pressing out on that one
overcrowded lung.
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Thank you all so much for your comments, favorites, and attention! I'm honored to receive them, and doing my best to personally convey that to each of you. I apologize if I can't get to you right away.
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Given 2013-01-15
The Nature of Lungs by *schongslipper has an exceptionally executed structure to complement the content of the poem. ( Featured by ^NicSwaner )
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:iconsakuradreamerz2:
This is amazing!
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=schongslipper Jan 16, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you so much!
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~Skylanth Jan 15, 2013  Hobbyist Artisan Crafter
Wonderful! Love the structure.
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=schongslipper Jan 16, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you! I tried to pull it off without having that one word a line thing going. I hope I achieved that...
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~Skylanth Jan 16, 2013  Hobbyist Artisan Crafter
I think so! It really has the rhythm of a deep inhale and exhale.
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=schongslipper Jan 16, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
thanks =]
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~restlessreverie Jan 15, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
congrats on the DD~^^ great piece!
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=schongslipper Jan 16, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you!
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This could be about all the useless crap in people's lives (including my own) and how humans always want more and more as if it will make them feel more satisfied, but in reality we would best off getting away from all these petty distractions that clog up our lives. I don't know though, I didn't write the poem... :/
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